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The Twitter Space I rewrite your content live (ghostedits and content shreds) hosted by TaylinSimmonds. Explore the evolution of writing in the digital age with insights from a former college teacher turned digital educator. Discover the art of live content rewriting, the future of writing, and the opportunity to become a Micro-Writer by joining the waitlist for ghostedits and content shreds on Oct. 8th. Embrace innovative approaches to writing, editing, and collaboration in the digital landscape to enhance your writing skills and techniques. Join the journey towards transforming writing practices and techniques in the modern era.
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Questions
Q: What role does live content rewriting play in shaping writing skills?
A: Live content rewriting enhances writing skills and techniques by providing real-time editing experiences.
Q: How can one join the waitlist for ghostedits and content shreds?
A: To join the waitlist for ghostedits and content shreds, interested individuals can sign up for Oct. 8th.
Q: What opportunities are available for aspiring writers on Oct. 8th?
A: Aspiring writers have the chance to become Micro-Writers and access exclusive content rewriting experiences.
Q: What inspired the transition from a college teacher to a digital educator?
A: The inspiration behind the transition was to lead the future of writing and embrace digital educational opportunities.
Q: How can live content rewriting benefit individuals interested in writing?
A: Live content rewriting offers real-time editing experiences that enhance writing skills, creativity, and proficiency.
Q: Why is it important to embrace the future of writing as a Micro-Writer?
A: Becoming a Micro-Writer allows individuals to explore new writing techniques, tools, and collaborative opportunities in the digital landscape.
Q: What can participants expect from the ghostedits and content shreds waitlist?
A: Participants can expect exclusive access to insights, tools, and experiences related to content rewriting and writing in the digital age.
Q: How has the digital era transformed the landscape of writing?
A: The digital era has led to innovative approaches to writing, editing, and publishing, offering new avenues for creative expression and collaboration.
Q: What makes the concept of ghostedits and content shreds unique?
A: Ghostedits and content shreds provide individuals with tailored editing and rewriting experiences to refine their writing skills and craft.
Q: What sets apart the evolution of writing in the digital age?
A: The evolution of writing in the digital age brings forth dynamic tools, platforms, and opportunities for individuals to engage with writing in innovative ways.
Highlights
Time: 00:15:40
Embracing Live Content Rewriting Exploring the benefits and impact of live content rewriting on writing skills.
Time: 00:25:12
Becoming a Micro-Writer Learn about the opportunities to become a Micro-Writer and join the waitlist for ghostedits and content shreds.
Time: 00:35:55
Transition to Digital Education Understanding the shift from traditional teaching to leading the future of writing as a digital educator.
Key Takeaways
- Insights on rewriting content live and the evolution of writing in the digital era.
- Opportunities to become a Micro-Writer and join the waitlist for ghostedits and content shreds.
- The transformation from a college teacher to a digital educator leading the future of writing.
- Exploring the significance of live content rewriting in enhancing writing skills and techniques.
- Joining the waitlist for Oct. 8th to learn more about becoming a Micro-Writer.
Behind the Mic
Opening Remarks
All right. How's it going, man? Can I get a little thumbs up or something if you can hear me? Okay. I don't usually do spaces from my laptop like this. Defi. Monk, what's going on? How are you doing? Requested. Let's see. Let's approve. Nice. Looks like I was able to approve you. I should have just done this on my phone. good, thanks. How are you doing, man? All good on my end. Nice. It's actually a pleasure to be here. I've actually been following your content for the past. Like, I just joined x, I think, like last month, and I've been seeing you popping up and I also saw your LinkedIn account. So amazing work that you're doing. Thank you. Thank you so much, man. I appreciate that. LinkedIn is kind of an afterthought for me, but I'm happy you enjoy the x content.
Content Sharing and Audience Engagement
It's actually amazing. I also read your story. Thanks. Hell yeah, man. I appreciate that. You welcome, everybody. I see there's more people piling in. Let me see if I can make. Cheyenne, you might have to request I made the mistake of starting this on my laptop. Maybe I can switch over to my phone. It's actually, like kind of janky to use on my laptop. Let's see. Sure. It's much easier when you use your phone, actually. Guess try this. there we go. Let's see if I can just quit and then join again on my phone. One sec, guys. It's okay. No worries. Okay. Can you still hear me okay? Yeah, I can hear you. We pulled it off. I was worried that when I closed Twitter, it was going to close the whole space down. Somehow pulled it off. Cheyenne, how are you doing today? Pretty good, actually. Pretty excited for this.
Discussion on Recent Experiences and Community Feedback
You survived your work layoffs. I did. I don't know if I'm supposed to say it out in public, so hush. Oh, Jesus. May be confidential. I think I was thinking of somebody else with work layoffs. Maybe it was. It was Dale. Yeah. Hope he survived. I hope he. I hope he survived. Who knows if he'll be around in the community much longer. All right, guys. Welcome. I see rich here. Rich, I've noticed you on a couple of spaces before. Tuan, welcome. Brandon. Good to have you here. The good old. Was it the cowboy hat bandit? Killian. Defi monk. I don't know how to say some of these names. Giovanni. Kalungi. Kalungi. How do you think you say that? Cheyenne. I don't know why you put me on the spot here, but I don't know. I don't know. Thank you. Kalungi.
Transition to Content Creation Workshop
there we go. I had to put you on the spot so that I felt less ridiculous for butchering it. I had to bring you down with me. All right, awesome, guys. Well, let's. Let's get into it. We're doing live content shreds today, so what we're gonna do is post any content that you are working on or that you have posted before in the comments below on this space. And we will talk about rewrites live. We'll see if we can do some fun stuff. We do this in the micro creators community every second week, but I've never done it on the timeline before with people, so this is going to be a new experience. So, guys, please find something that you'd like some feedback on or some rewrites, some ghost edits, and pop it in the comments. And once we get the first one, we'll get started. Cheyenne, how you feeling about doing this live on a. On a space as opposed to in the community? Feel pretty good. I mean, no one can see my face, so I feel like less, you know, less stress.
Searching for Content and Audience Participation
Yeah, 100%. 100%. Gustav, you got anything you want roasted? Gonna pop in the comments? Yeah, sure. Let me pull something and then just post in a few. Sweet. I understand it might take people a little bit of time, so no worries. Tulsi. Welcome. Kirk. Welcome Jero as well. Welcome to the space. For those that are joining a little bit later, of course, getting notifications. Those that joined a little bit later, please feel free to just pop some content in the comments below and we will start roasting. Otherwise we might have to roast my content. Cheyenne, we'll have no other choice. That'll be fun. We'll let everyone else take a stab at it. Yeah, there we go. There we go. It's been fun. You know, while we're waiting for some say, some stuff to go into the comments there, we'll say, I'm trying to think if there's like a tip or a funny story that I can give on x content these days.
Experiences with Content Creation
You know, actually, here's one thing. I'm experimenting a lot with what I call micro video, which is just basically short reels that are 20 to 40 seconds long and attaching them to my tweets. And it's been fun to do, but honestly been a pain in the ass to shoot them because I'm living in Germany right now and you don't realize how freaking loud the city is. I have to go to a very specific park where there's not a whole lot of noise and it's about 30 minutes away and I don't have a car here. So I walked. And then the other day I was shooting them and a giant, like, a track and field team just decided to run through, like, yelling when I was mid video. That was done. And then someone decided to do landscaping one of the apartment buildings. Those, those. Couldn't do those anymore. I had to, like, scrap all those videos. There's been some mornings that I've gone to shoot, like, five minutes of video and I swear it has taken me over an hour because of the amount of times that I get interrupted by either a car horn or noise.
Reflection on the Content Creation Process
But you know what, I will say that overall, it has been more than worth it and really fun to actually play around with video on the timeline. So that's my funny story for the day. Cheyenne, I'm going to pass it over to you now. Do you got any content related stories that come to mind that you could share? Oh, man. Content deleted. Yeah, very quickly put me on the spot there. Thank you. Very glad. I'm not my job today. I mean, I think the biggest ones for me usually are when I'm doing. So. I do a lot of threads. Some of you that follow me know that it's something that I've experimented with a long time, for a long time. And what I found is autocorrect can ruin your threads a little bit of. So I did one recently, and I, I know how to spell the guy's name, but it got autocorrected, so it's spelled completely different.
Humorous Anecdotes and Lesson on Writing
It did pretty well, had 1.5 million impressions. So I just left it on there. No one even called it out. But, like, the first tweet, like, the top of the tweet is the guy's name spelled incorrectly. So those are some of my funny. It's happened multiple times, too, so. Oh, man. Yeah, that's one of those things that's like, it's just bound to happen at some point in time. Dale and I, for those that don't know, Dale's the co-founder behind everything that I've done with online business. We go back and forth on this all the time because I really don't care that much about, like, spelling mistakes. I'm just like, whatever, you know, I'm not, like, a grammatical genius. I don't care about proper English and like, perfect English. But Dale has since pointed out that, like, other people really do, and that's what matters.
Adapting to Audience Expectations
Like, I used to get quite a bit of responses to my newsletters that, like, someone would say, oh, you spelled this one word wrong. Or hey, this sentence is grammatically incorrect. And Dale was like, dude, we help people learn to write and you're butchering your writing. Like, your English with the written word is terrible. We need to take it more seriously just because other people take it more seriously. So now every time I write something, I have to go through the extra step of copying it over into a Google Doc or into chat GPT and just run it through a quick spell check just to make sure that I don't get any emails or messages from anyone. Being like, you spelt like xyz wrong. So that's a, that has been a little annoying, I will say. But I understand you got to play to the market and what people expect and all right, I see we got Jens, we got Andre. Join in as well.
Interactive Segment with the Audience
John. Welcome, John Lyons. We haven't chatted in a long time. I think the last time we chatted was like a year ago. Man. It's good to see you. To everyone else that's popping in. Awesome to have you guys here. We're doing ghost edits and content shreds live today. This is the first time we've ever attempted this and so far it is going horrible because we are waiting for people to post their content in the comments. I can hear you. I don't know why, but I can't post from my end. Is it a feature that's supposed to be enabled or something close to that? Because I can't share. There you go. Yeah. Let's see if we can. If there's a way that I can change this.
Technical Difficulties and Solutions
I actually can't see. I wonder if it's because I started this on my laptop and not on my phone that it made this so ridiculous. Yeah, I can't actually access the chat either. It's interesting. We shot ourselves in the foot right off the bat, I should say. I did. We started a space where people can't leave comments. Yep. I was just trying to write something and I. There's no space. All right, guys, this is what we're going to do. We're going to improv this on the fly. I'm going to post a tweet, put your shreds here in the comments, and then everyone can comment on this tweet that I just posted on my timeline and we'll go through and we'll shred the stuff. How hilarious. I'm sitting here stalling and meanwhile, like, people just can't post anything.
Adapting to Audience Engagement
Wait, why don't you just post a link to this space on your timeline and then people can comment on that link directly, right? I did. Let's see. I did have one that I did yesterday. Maybe I'll just retweet it. If you like, hit the plus sign on the bottom. That should let you post that on your timeline, I think. Post this. Okay, there, we did it. My Twitter feed is about to become an absolute shit show. Random content. Okay, it's posted. We now have a space live on the timeline that you can comment on. So I'll say put your shreds in the comments here. All right, perfect. Got it open. So let's see what we get.
Encouraging Participant Contributions
So, guys, just go. If you want your content shredded, if you want any feedback, just go to, just add you here, Kathy, just go to my profile. You'll see a, we'll say the space as I rewrite your content live. And just in the comments, add whatever post you would like to be rewritten or you'd like feedback on. And we will do that. We are patiently waiting. Cheyenne, we got a like, but we haven't got a comment yet. Oof. This is going very well. This is going fantastic. Everyone gets to see what it's actually like to do something new. Live format. Looks like Cheyenne and I will just have to bounce back and forth with stories.
Engaging with the Audience and Next Steps
Okay, we actually do have one now. We have Brandon Spring. I've got one I'd love you to shred. All right, let's do this. Ooh, it's a pretty good one. How I solve 99% of my problems. Tired. Sleep. Confused. Ask frustrated. Move. Uninspired. Read stuck. Walk away. Overthinking. Right? Scared. Do the hard thing. Impatient. Review. Progress. Burned out. Go on vacations. Unmotivated. Remember my why? The most obvious answers are the dude, I gotta say I'm mad impressed with this tweet. I really like it. First impression. Cheyenne, what do you think?
Participants Reflect on Content Quality
I completely agree. And I think, you know, he's put a lot of practice in. So. So for people that don't know, he's part of the community too. So he gets to practice a lot with us. And I think it shows, right? Yeah, 100%. This tweet is really freaking good. I like it. The middle part maybe what I'll do here. I want to see if it'll let me refresh my feed. And I'm going to see if I can actually pin this tweet so that everyone can see the tweet. That we're working on. Let's see if it, let me. There we go. Okay. So everyone can click on that if they want to see. And then that'll also give you the comment section. We're doing the roasting.
Feedback on Content Structure
So I originally didn't like the first sentence of this one when I read it, how I solved 99% of my problems. I was like, eh, like, maybe it's okay. But then as I read the tweet, I actually liked it a lot. I like that it's general, that it goes kind of broad. I like that you have really relatable lists in the middle, relatable facets. The most obvious answers are the best, as the final sentence is pretty good. But what I think it might be missing is, like, what does the best actually mean? Like, maybe it's not necessarily the best. Like, what are we trying to say here? The most obvious answers are often the ones you need.
Identifying Improvements for Content
The most obvious answers are the only ones you need the most obvious answers. What else could that be? Cheyenne, you got any ideas for the final sentence? Let's see the most obvious answers. I'm kind of, like, getting to that. I think for me, as I, like, go down the whole list, I'm getting just kind of, this is me being very nit picky and this is just formatting, right? I think I like the arrows all to be, like, in line almost. Again, very nitpicky. Has nothing to do with the quality of the writing. And then I think, scared. Do the hard thing. Right? Like, what does the hard thing really mean? So I'm just kind of thinking of, like, some of these are a little vague.
Refining Language for Clarity
So that one, then remember my why. My why might be a little vague, right? I think, like, remembering your purpose, maybe a little more specific, just kind of tonality. And the way a particular word makes you feel, I think that's like, why doesn't make you feel a certain way, right? The word why. But the word purpose has a little more of a punch behind it. It carries more weight. So just picking and choosing words intentionally there. I like it. Now that we're getting nitpicky, we're just gonna say, Brandon, because your writing doesn't have arrows that all align, your writing sucks. We're sorry to break it to you.
Final Thoughts on Content Improvement
It's terrible. Delete the tweet. Just give up. The arrows don't align. But you know what, Cheyenne, since you said that one way, that this may be an OCD thing for me, but one way that could make this maybe better is if it was always one word. How? It's like, tired, sleep, confused, ask, frustrated, move, and then when it gets to stuck, walk away. But, like, I don't know, I feel like now you've got this, like, really good symmetry of, like, one word, one word. And then when it gets into, like, the two words or the three words, I don't mind it. And I think it still works, but I think it could hit harder if it was always, like, a one word answer.
Emotion in Writing and Audience Connection
But honestly, if I'm just OCD as hell or if Cheyenne agrees with me. Yeah, I mean, I think that's the part where, like, the arrow is not aligning the words. Like, it breaks the flow slightly where, like, if you're looking to incite an emotional reaction from someone reading it, they might get to that point and be like, oh, okay, okay. I guess. Makes sense, right? But, like, I. It's not going to be like, oh, wow. Oh, my God. That hits hard, right? Like, it's nuanced, but very. I feel you. Yeah, yeah, I know what you mean. The arrows would line up a lot closer if you did that.
The Essence of Emotional Content Delivery
The thing is, I. I just. My razor for writing good content is whatever has the most emotion. Like, that. You know, we're talking about, like, formatting stuff and, like, symmetry. But if this version had more emotion, I would still be like, just do it. Like, I'll give you guys a story. That one time we wrote for this client, and it was like an Elon Musk leaked email, and it was, like, the most janky sentence I think I've ever written. Like, it wasn't even correct English. It was like, Elon Musk link, like, leaked email and then some, like, random thing, and it didn't make sense, but I'm like, I just. It'll just work.
The Power of Emotional Engagement
Trust me. And it went, like, really viral for our client, but the English wasn't proper, and I think it's just because the emotion was there. Like, it had higher curiosity. I wish I could remember, like, what exactly I wrote to you so you can know, but I also can't help the client. Yeah. So emotionality at all. So, Brandon, can I get a thumbs up from you? If all of this makes sense, I'm sure he will in a second, or he's going to give us a thumbs down and be like, no, I just wanted you to like it. Huge improvements, though. Like, this is really good. Like, I'm actually really impressed with this tweet. This tweet is awesome.
Introductory Remarks
There we go. Delayed thumbs up. He was probably, like, walking around cooking dinner or something. Okay, let me refresh my page and let's see what else we got here. Now, Tuan just drops a viral thread in here. Just like shred my. Shred my giga viral thread. Tawan, how about we not shred your gigaviral thread? Oh, that's so funny. I love that.
Discussing Ideas
All right, how about this tail and. Okay, let's see what we got here. You might dislike an idea, so there's a real human being behind it. It's fine to disagree with the idea, but don't hate the person and avoid imposing your idea on people who aren't interested. This is a cool tweet and it seems like it did fairly well. 51 comments 75 I do feel like there's a decent amount of room for improvement. So, Cheyenne, I'm going to give you a heads up that I'm going to put you on the spot here, but I'll give you some time to noodle on this first.
Analyzing the Concept
Thanks. Got you. So you might dislike an idea, but there's a real human being behind it. I love the like that as an idea is really good, but I just feel like it's not. It's not said in like a way that I think is as emotional as it could be. It could be like, just because you dislike an idea doesn't mean you have to dislike the person. I feel like your first three sentences could be summed up in one sentence, but then at the same time, I'm going to play devil's advocate with myself and say that your second sentence is really good for humanizing the tweet and making it feel a bit more conversational.
Refinement Process
So one angle would be like, let's see, maybe you want to, maybe not target the person directly. It could be like, most miserable people I know are, or most people that are miserable take offense to everything they dislike an idea and then blame the person. And then the final sentence could be like, it's fine to disagree. That doesn't mean that you can't still be friends. Like, something like that in like angle could work as a rewrite while still keeping the essence of your idea. Cheyenne, what are you thinking?
Identifying Disjointed Sentences
I'm trying to kind of break it down into what the tweet is trying to say, and I think there's something between the first sentence and the second sentence that makes it a little disjointed. And I'm not really sure what it is when I'm reading it. You might dislike an idea, but there's a real humanity behind it. If I read it as a single sentence, it works. But I don't know if it's the formatting or if it's just like a specific word, like, but instead. Because instead of, but, like, the essence. Essences, right. Like, I think when you break it down, you're trying to say one idea doesn't define a person. A single idea won't define a person, whether good or bad. Right. We attach our opinions to the idea, but we shouldn't attach our opinions to that person, our opinions of that idea to that person.
Moving Forward with Rewrites
So the way I look at it, right, I'm trying to break it down to, like, what is, like, the core meaning behind it. And that's what I'm getting out of it. So now, keeping that in mind, how would we rewrite that if not, that would be my next step. Yeah, that's a good point. What you're making me reflect on when I was saying I think the first three sentences could be turned into one, is that it almost feels like there's a missing piece between the first two sentences. Maybe that's what you mean by disjointed. Because I'm reading it like, okay, you might dislike an idea, so I'm telling someone, you dislike an idea, but there's a human behind it. And I don't really know what you mean by that.
Clarifying Intentions
Do you mean just because you dislike an idea doesn't mean you have to dislike the person? Is it like, hey, it also sounds like. And maybe this is it. It feels vague because it could have multiple meanings. Because the other way I interpret it is, hey, you might dislike an idea you see online, but then you shit on them, not realizing there's actually a person, not a profile on the other side. So there's. To me, it's like dualistic in its meanings. It's not clear right away. It could either say it's okay to disagree with an idea, but you don't have to hate the person. Or it could say there's an idea here and you're shitting on them, not realizing there's a person behind it who you actually should, like, show respect for.
Seeking Clarity
Which to me those sound like different ideas. Does that make sense, Cheyenne? Yeah. Yeah. I mean, that's exactly kind of what I'm getting at. Gotcha. Gotcha. I'm trying to think what would be a good rewrite. Like, I think we need that. That second sentence is the only one that I would really tweak first and then go from there. The first line is fine. I think. I think you could write. I'm gonna actually, like, write this out in the comments. People are gonna read this tweet, and they're gonna think I'm an absolute arrogant piece of shit.
Defining Content
I'm just writing real and I'm gonna rewrite his tweet. It's gonna be like, why is Taylor just rewriting this guy's tweet randomly? So let's see. You might dislike an idea. You may even disagree with it. Disagree with it? Man, my spelling mistakes are bad, but that doesn't mean you have to hate the person behind it. Hate the person who said it. Also, the last sentence is a different idea. And you can even tell it's, like, not meant to be there because you're using the word end. It's like you've overextended the thought. So you have a complete idea, and they're like, and don't impose your will on others. That should just be a separate tweet.
Engaging the Audience
Cheyenne, are you typing a note as well? Is that why you muted. No, I'm running rewrites in my head, and I, like, talk to myself, so I'm trying not to impose that on you guys. Either way, it's all good. Either way. So I have. You might dislike an idea. You may even disagree with it, but that doesn't mean you have to hate the person who said it. Trying to think, what are some other ways that we could really spice this one up? We could add, like, some contrast, like, when we're doing, like, really tight tweets.
Exploring Contrasting Ideas
Like, this contrast could be good. It's like, you can dislike an idea without hitting the person, and then you could go, you can like a person and you can dislike the idea. So you could actually play with it in, like, some contrast there. I'll give you, like, multiple versions here. So I'm kind of going, like, a little more contrasty. Right? So I think instead of just, like, I would. If you put hate is a stronger word. So saying something like, you might hate the idea, and then you can follow up with almost a question, but why hate the person? That's a nice one.
Discussion on Writing Simplification
Yeah. What do you think could be another way to say contraction? Just combine two words into one, but you just make it super simple. I would maybe not even, like. How about simplifying? Right? Just simplify your writing or make your writing simple or easier to read. Like something along those lines. Why use two words when you can use one technically? There's your good. There's your final sentence. You can use one. I think, like, our rewrites won't solve the problem of. I just think you need to have, like, an actual, like, reason to back up your claim as to, like, why this makes writing more persuasive. Like, when I think of persuasive writing, I think of not necessarily simple writing. Like, simple writing like, this, to me is more of like a business communication tool or just making it easier to understand. Persuasion would be more about advantages and disadvantages, comparison, strong reasons and strong whys or philosophies and opportunities. So to me, that's the thing that I think at the core, the framing of this doesn't work. But Cheyenne, Brandon, what do you guys think?
Examples and Suggestions
Brandon passing it off to you? Yeah, I think it would be really cool, Cameron, if you can find an example like a, you know, one sentence that shows not using contraction and then one that does. I was actually googling it, but I haven't found it in yet. I'm just trying to demonstrate that it's much more persuasive to write this way than this way with an example of a bad and then a good. The bad and the good. That's a good way to do this type of tweet showing, like, less persuasive with more persuasive. I like that. All right, cool, guys, it looks like we are getting a lot more comments in the chat. Maybe. Let's see. Let's refresh. So, Cameron, we're moving on. Appreciate you throwing it up into the shred. That was a fun one. Okay, yeah, we've got a little bit more in here now. Let's see. So I gotta look at the timestamps just to see which ones were posted in what order. See, Andre, so we're up to you next. Okay, time to put my Chris Williamson podcast voice on as we read this out.
Thoughts on Social Media Growth
All right, so I'm obsessed with social media growth. I've been studying it every day for 500 days. Here's the wild system I've created that helped me gain nearly 400 followers. Okay, so a few things I like about this. Right off the bat, I know this is off of referencing a proven framework. I think that's great. So you're referencing stuff that's working the I'm obsessed with x. Saying that you've been studying it for a long amount of time is good. That adds a sense of credibility and would increase your follower conversion because you're using iframing, saying, like, I've done this. Here's the wild system I've created that helped me gain nearly 400 followers saying, here's process. In your case, a system to gain this result is good, the framework works, and you're following it correctly. Where I think this post falls a little flat is the elements that you're putting in the framework, I don't think resonate enough or have a strong enough promise of value.
Further Refinements and Suggestions
So, for example, I'm obsessed with social media growth. I think that could work. Like, maybe it could be there's a way to improve it, but I can't think of one off the top of my head right now. I've been studying it every day for 500 days. Maybe you could say I've spent the past 500 days studying Dan Co, Justin Welsh, and Tuan Trong to find their secrets instead of here's the wild system. Because wild sounds like you're being overly buzzy. Like it. People want simple systems. If anything, they don't want, like, wild complexity. So I think you're choosing the wrong modifier. You'd be like, here's the simple system I've created. Or here's the simple system I've used to gain nearly 400 followers. I think the amount of followers you've gained for the amount of time that you've studied it is underwhelming, unfortunately. I like that you're using social proof, and I think it's a smart choice. But for someone who studied content for a year and a half and has gained 400 followers, I don't think that looks that impressive, unfortunately. So those are the thoughts off the top of my head.
Analyzing Frameworks and Suggestions
Cheyenne, I'm gonna throw the porcupine over to you. As the saying goes. I think it's, from a framework standpoint, it's written really well. And I think, like what Taylor said, what you need to play around with is the elements of that framework a little more. I agree. Like, you've been studying it every day for 500 days. That could mean a lot of different things. So adding some additional authority or borrowing authority from potentially bigger creators there might be helpful. And then the last line, you could tweak it to where maybe you mentioned the number of days, or you don't even have to use yourself as an example. Right? And that lack, because you've already said you are, you're studying this in that last part, you can say, here's the system, the simple system that all of these creators used to gain, and you can combine all of their followers.
Creative Angles and Engagement
So you could say, like, let's say you're picking three creators that you're, you can say you were studying three creators, right? Those three creators, if they combine to have, like, a million followers, you can say that. Or if they. If these are, like, creators that are up and coming and they have, like, 50,000 followers, but they gained it in a matter of six months, you can say these three creators gained 50,000 followers in six months using this simple system, right? And then when you go into your thread, however you want to structure it, but, like, you can bring it back to yourself and what you learned and how you're implementing it and kind of thread those pieces of it in and out of the entire thread. But that would, that's kind of how I'm looking at this. So, Brandon, want to throw the porcupine to you now?
Thoughts from Brandon
No, I love it. I love where you guys are going with it. Andre, I like it, too. My thoughts, again, I apologize for my voice. It's in and out. I really like shifting from studying it for 500 days to just calling out that maybe the top three creators in this space that you've been that you could find some commonality in the systems that they've used. And then, like Cheyenne was saying, you know, your third sentence could be something like, you know, here's a simple system they, all of them have used to build an audience of over x million followers or whatever the number is.
Brandon's Reflection on Parenting
Brandon, what about you? Yeah, I actually had started reading it and having kids myself. I can definitely relate to a lot of what she's talking about. I think the common theme that jumps out to me instantly is basically the idea that kids are a blessing. You should love having kids. It's an amazing thing, and yet it's, like, the hardest thing you've ever done in your life, and it's super frustrating. And there's often times when you're questioning what you're doing. So I like that idea. I think it's much more relatable. It'd be cool if we could figure out a way to get that up into the. Into the hook.
Connection to the Topic
Maybe because I'm not a parent, I have a harder time connecting with this one. It sounds like you want to go with the angle. That's more like being a parent. You basically lay out all the negatives of being a parent. Like, pull on someone's emotions. Like, being a parent is exhausting, expensive, scary, yada, yada. But it's also the most fulfilling experience that any human could possibly have. Five things that all parents have thought that they would never want to admit to their kids about something like that.
Exploring Parental Emotions
Brandon. Yeah, I think that would hit. I think she's done a good job of talking to the pain. Like, the. The thoughts that go through your head as a parent often, like, you know, number five, having kids is the worst thing that's ever happened to me. You know? Like, it's easy to think that because your life completely changes when you have kids, right? Like, it's no longer about you and your wife or your husband. It's. It's you and them and the kids. And when you've got a screaming baby, you know, it takes priority over, like, everything because you've got a screaming baby.
The Fear of Sharing
Yeah. I like the angle that you were playing. I think that would, that would resonate a lot more and probably get a lot more people engaged enough to keep reading it. And almost like, you're playing on the idea that it's like, people don't want to talk about it, but it's the thing that everybody's thinking. Yeah, and that's exactly it. Like, a good idea a lot of times calls out what a lot of people are thinking, but what they're, like, too afraid to say. This is, like, so hard for me to say, like, tangibly, because it's kind of an abstract idea, but it's that there's always what is socially acceptable to say and then what people actually think and feel.
The Dichotomy of Parenting
And the more misaligned those things are, the more opportunity you have to come in and say those things and give a voice to the people that feel underrepresented because they're not, quote unquote, allowed to say it or it's not socially acceptable to say it. So I like that angle with this one of, you know, talking about all the negative things about children, which is very socially acceptable to say, and then saying, like, you know, people don't want to, parents don't want to admit this to their kids, and then you be very honest about that pain that they would feel, the things that they would think that they would never actually want to say.
Collaborative Input
I think that would resonate with a lot of people. So Brandon, I like that. That approach. All right. Nothing to add? Yeah. What do you love both your guys rewrites. I was thinking something along the lines of calling out the. The tension between the two. In the first line, being a mother is both the greatest blessing imaginable, and it's the hardest thing ever. But we're not allowed to talk about how hard it is. Or here's the things that we're afraid we would never admit to our children. Something like that.
Clarifying the Message
Right. But I was thinking of angle of tying it into the first sentence. The dichotomy between being a mother is a blessing, and it's also the hardest thing ever. And then the second line being along the lines of, you know, why we would never want to admit it to our children. And, you know, here are the things that. That we would never want to admit.
Enhanced Collaboration and Discussion
I like that, man. I love both of these ideas, guys. I do think the whole idea of like, but would never admit to our children or would never admit to their children, I think that has a lot of emotional pull to it. So I like that angle. All right, kick ass. Kick ass. I see that. I think I went through the chat, and the person who posted it isn't even in here anymore. So we're not going to do too much of a detailed rewrite on this one.
Transitions in Discussion
Chris, have you watched the recording? I apologize, my man, but. Okay, awesome. Let's look at who we had next. That was 38 minutes ago. I got one at 22 minutes. Just scrolling through to see who would be the next one to roast. I think we got all of them at the top except for Esau. Okay, let me see here. Next one. Check this, please. All right, Alberto, you got it? Let's see. Is the man with us in the chat? Yes, he is.
Reading the Next Input
All right, great. You are up next. Brandon, if it will let you pin it to the chat, that would be awesome. I'm struggling. All good, man. I'm trying to find it. I'm on my computer, not my phone. Phone. Oh, I think that's why. I think we got to be on our phone. All right, no worries, dude. We don't need to pin it then. We're both on our computer, so we're kind of hooped.
Initial Impressions on Personal Journey
All right, I know. I tried on my computer, too, and it didn't work. Okay, Alberta, let's read this out. So, four months ago, I had fear. Fear of failure, fear of never going back, fear of wasting my potential woke up and wasted every day fighting my mind stressed how did I escape? Got my bike, found a quiet place and thought something I hadn't done in a long time, with a picture that says think.
Feedback and Suggestions
Okay, so we'll follow a similar format here to what we've done with the other ones. I'm going to go some general thoughts, and then we'll get into the nitty gritty with a rewrite. So, first off, I think that this is too general to hit. And it seems like you don't know who you're talking to because fear of failure, fear of never going back, but fear of never going back to what? Fear of wasting my potential. Broad? Yes, like, very broad.
Clarifying the Generalities
Fear that I have a hard time relating to because it's just not specific enough. It's not the way that I would say something in my mind. Then it's, like, woke up and wasted every day, but, like, wasted it. How I need to be able to connect with the ways that you're wasting it. Fighting my mind. It's like that part, fighting my mind is pretty good, actually. I like that part. Personally stressed, but, like, stressed about what? How did I escape?
Describing Life Events
Got my bike, found a quiet place, and thought, I actually do like the ending a little bit. It's like it ends strong. Something I hadn't done in a long time. Very conversational at the end. It's not punchy at the end. It's conversational. But, like, I do. Like, I think it ends pretty strong. Like, it's relatable at the end. Like, I can imagine myself getting on a bike, just biking over to, like, a tree in a quiet ass place and just sitting there and thinking and being like, I feel great.
Ending Strong
And that's why the ending hits so much harder than the beginning. So that's my thought off the top of my head. Brandon, what are you thinking? I'll jump to the end. I was. I was actually kind of thinking a little bit different than you. When he said, got my bike, found a quiet place, and thought I. It kind of threw me off a little bit because I was expecting, when I read bike, I was imagining him riding his bicycle and thinking as he was riding.
Exploring Different Perspectives
And then along that line of thinking, you know, it'd be really cool to see a picture of him riding a bike instead of, you know, this picture. But when you said that, it kind of connected those dots for me. So there might be a little bit of a disconnect there with, you know, is it that you found a quiet place to think, or is it that you were thinking while riding your bike? I think making the distinction would help kind of bring it more clearly. Together.
Relatable Conclusions
But I do like how it ended. I think that's very relatable. There's some good thoughts. I didn't think about reading it that way. That's interesting. Anything else jump out of you? I think back in the beginning talking about fear. As I read this, what comes to mind for me is, like, you know, at the end of the day, like, I'm afraid that at the end of every single day, I reflect on the day and realize that, you know, I just, like, I lost another one.
The Struggle of Time
I wasted another day. I'm not moving towards my goals or my dreams or whatever because I don't even know what they are. You know, I'm so caught up in the day to day everything that I just can't focus on doing the work that really matters. Jesus Christ, Brandon, you just gave me fucking chills, bro. That was so relatable.
Impact of Personal Struggle
I think it's because your voice is, like, you sound sick that it actually makes what you're saying legit sound like you're in it. Maybe. And maybe you actually are. I'm losing money over playing into the. Fact that maybe I'm over playing it to the fact you're losing your voice. But when you just said that, I'm like, damn, that was so relatable. And that I think that makes this tweet hit a little bit harder.
Final Thoughts
It's just adding more of the specific relatability. So I really like that. Yeah. Taylor, I was going to add to, like, a totally different angle. And what your thoughts are on this. I agree that the ending feels conversational and more personal and relatable. What about in the beginning doing something like, storytelling tactic type stuff about, like, getting into the physical sensation.
Engaging the Audience
So, like, not just saying I had fear, but I had, you know, a consuming fear. Something about my, I couldn't. My breath was shallow, you know, my palms were sweaty. Whatever. I can't think of anything off the top of my head but, like, getting, like, making it sort of conversational and storytelling at the beginning instead of just. I had a fear of wasting my potential, this and that, like, drawing them in to, like, this is how it feels to feel fear.
Building Towards the Revelation
And this is what I did about it. I got up, rode my bike, and thought. I like that. Some good thoughts, too. All right, guys, we got a lot of ammo for this one. If I was to do a rewrite on this, it's, this one's a little bit tough to rewrite because I have to rewrite it from my perspective. Perspective because I don't know exactly what you have the fear of.
Contextualizing the Experience
I do like Brandon's angle, but I couldn't remember how to write it off the top of my head. So it would probably be something like four months ago, this happened because you said you had fear, implying that it's gone, but you haven't said, like, what specific incident, like, gave you the fear. Like, it sounds like there was something that happened. Did you lose your job?
Personalizing the Narrative
Did you, like, feel like you weren't growing online? Did your business lose a client? Did something happen in your personal life? If you could add a personal anecdote there. Four months ago, I lost the biggest client that we ever signed. I became. It made me so depressed, and I had the fear that we would never make it back again.
Finding Clarity
I then started wasting every day ruminating on the fact that I had missed the greatest opportunity of my life. So what did I do? I got on my bike. Bike down to a quiet place, and just thought something I hadn't done in a long time, like, something like that, I think, could work. It just need to be punchier because I'm going kind off the cuff, since I have to add quite a bit of context.
Acknowledging the Progress
Brandon, rewrite. Yeah, I like that. I like that you had added a specific thing that happened that caused the fear. I think that it kind of shows, you know, like Nick was saying, right? It kind of starts telling the story of, you know, I was here and I was afraid, and, you know, this is how I was feeling.
Consolidating the Message
And then, you know, I got on a bike, found a quiet place, and started thinking, I like that. I think that kind of ties it all together and makes the idea more clear of what the problem is and how he's solving it. I like that. I'm just writing out a few tips of what we're saying here. Quiet place or to a quiet place.
Finalizing the Thoughts
Perfect. There we go. I like that. All right, awesome, guys. Let's see. Going through. What else do we have here? All right, I know that there's a bunch of people that would like some shreds, but we might only have time for, like, one more. Unfortunately, I do have to hop off and get some dinner ready pretty soon, but let's do a quick review.
Closing Remarks
We're going to end on a big one here. I don't know how to say this. Me har car, mehar car, something like that. We will end with yours. Let's see. Actually, I don't even think she's in here with us right now, so, no, we won't end on that. One. We'll pick someone who is here. Looks like we've actually lost quite a few of the people who were gonna roast.
Engaging the Group
Ajit is still here. Awesome. He popped it up. All right, let's see what we got. Of course it's a long one. It's our last one that's long, and it did quite well. That's freaking awesome. Personal brand expert. Dude, you're crushing it, man. Ghost writing. 30,000 followers. Hell, yeah.
Sharing Success Stories
So. All right. August 2023. Left my UPSC prep journey. I personally don't know what that means, but I'm assuming it's like a school, so you've kind of lost me on the first sentence, but that might just be, like, just me. Started freelancing and community building. Learn. Struggled to earn money. No hard and soft skills.
Transformational Journey
Skills. Had no money to spend on necessities. August 2024. Solving business problems and building personal brands. Crossed 20,000 followers. Getting clients from referrals and inbounds. Scale business from zero to ten k followers. Bought a MacBook pro. M three. Bought an iPhone.
Wealth and Knowledge Acquisition
Started investing in the stock market. Earned the value of money. Shifted one of the expensive areas of Delhi. It just takes a bold decision and six months of hard work to completely transform your life. Lesson or pro tip. Stay consistent and be hungry for growth.
Reflections on the Content
All right. There's a lot of stuff I like about this because it's highly relatable and it's a great transformation. The picture is good, too, because it's just super casual. It's like, almost like an Instagram style picture that I really like. A couple things that I think could be different about this that would help it perform even better is, again, it's probably just me, but I don't know what UPSC prep journey is.
Enhancing Clarity and Specificity
If you could add more specificity so that it would appeal to someone who doesn't know what that is, I think that would help. Struggle to earn money. No hard and soft skill. It'd be no hard or soft skills or just like, no high value skills would probably better. Had no money to spend on necessities, had no extra money.
Suggestions for Improvement
You could maybe just simplify that. And I see we got August 2024. There's a lot of unnecessary capitals in this, which makes it hard to read, so you don't really need to use the unnecessary capitals at all. Cross 28K followers and X is great. Getting clients for what could you say?
Detailing Experience
Ghost writing clients like that would just help, maybe even increase the inbound a bit more by being more targeted this sentence is confusing to me. Scale business from zero to ten k followers. Like, I don't know what you mean by scale. The business's follower count.
Personal Thoughts
I personally don't really care that you bought a MacBook or an iPhone, but that could just be me. I feel like those are kind of irrelevant. You could maybe say, like, unless you were, like, finally able to afford my own laptop. Finally able to afford a nice laptop so that it's like, it feels like something that was out of reach for you.
Linking Success to Personal Growth
And then it's a more inspiring way of saying that you just bought some expensive tech, started investing in the stock market. That's dope. I think you could also say, like, also, like, finally able to have extra money to invest in the stock markets. Like, you finally have that extra money learning the value of money.
Final Adjustments for Success
I think you could scrap, shifted, or moved to one of the expensive areas of Delhi. That's pretty cool. It just takes, all it takes is a bold decision and six months of hard work to transform your life. And then I think at the end where it says lesson or pro tip, you could eliminate that. And I'd eliminate the squares in the August 2023 and 2024 just because this is, like, a lot.
Visual Presentation Choices
Like, I look at it on the screen, it's just really overwhelming. So you could also cascade the list so it's easier to read. So off the top of my head, those are some things that come to mind. Brandon. Yeah, this is a really cool transformation. Like, clearly you've accomplished something really awesome.
Highlighting Achievements
I think it's cool to highlight it. Thank you so much for highlighting all those points. I'll take care of it. Whenever I write my next piece of content, I'll try to make it as relatable as much as I can. And thanks for reviewing this, and thanks for taking this.
Concluding the Session
Got you, bro. Yeah, this was a fun one. I like it because this one, like, it performed quite well. And it's a really good tweet. There's just some ways to optimize it to make it perform even better. Nick, anything that comes to mind? No, basically everything you said, I think making it a little tighter.
Reflecting on Improvement
I think the first line also, it lost me, so. And I don't know, maybe you have a very specific niche audience that will totally understand what you mean there. If you want to reach to an even bigger audience, find a same way to say that is a little bit more general.
Personal Touch in Messaging
And then I like Taelyn's notes about the more personal side of, like, yeah, not just buying a MacBook. And an iPhone. But finally being able to afford it is great. Again, more personal and finally having some extra money and then yeah, just aesthetically, like the cascading effect, like Taylor said, like just make it a little bit easier to read and more visually appealing.
Appreciation and Encouragement
But this is amazing. I mean this is a killer thread, a killer story that you told here. So it's just little tweaks to make it a little more appealing to a broader audience, bring more people in. But great work, man, keep it up. Thank you guys. Thank you so much. It means a lot.
Final Closure
Yeah, dude, got you. Well I was at it, I was just looking at your profile too. I think there's some small optimization things you could do here. I would have like the AVG personal branding expert, I would remove that helping CEO's and founders to scale 1 million monthly views in 45 days using proven growth strategies that could just be set a little tighter.
Optimizing Presentation
It just, it's a lot to like read and say like you can even pop it in chat GPT and just say write this more like punchy and then kind of like edit it and it'd probably be fine. Adding spaces between your like your little breaks where it says like growth strategy and there's a break that's like 20k earned organically and then another space because it's just a very condensed bio.
Profile Improvement
Like it almost feels like there's not enough. Yes, because of the that to 120 that character limit. That's because I had to do. But I will tweak it with the help of chat GPD as well. Thank you so much for that solution as well. Yeah, yeah, I totally get that man.
Acknowledging Achievements
20K earned organically. I personally think you could get rid of that. But I only say that because founders and CEO's might not see that as like impressive because they're going to make so much money. Having like the clients that you served I think is great. DM to grow your business is great.
Visual Considerations
And then I think your banner on mobile is going to be too small to read and it could just have like a nicer design. I think if you even paid like a designer that's not even that much money, like to remake it because you have all the social proof and I really like everything that's up there.
Final Recommendations
It's just also like a lot. There's like some subtle changes like this and then your website at Card co. Go to namecheap and for like $2 you can buy a custom domain and attach it to card and then you'll have like a custom domain that just like, looks really good. Those changes alone, like, they're.
Elevating Professional Appearance
They're subtle, but they'll make your profile just, like, pop. And you'll look so much more professional, man, because you already have all the social proof and you're winning. So hopefully that you find that useful. And that is amazing.
Expressing Gratitude
Thank you. Thank you. Awesome. Got you, man. All right, everyone, we're gonna wrap it up there. It's been an hour and a half. Thank you to everyone who popped in and stuck around for so long.
Reflecting on the Session
This was the first time we've ever done ghost edits and content shreds live. A little bit of technical difficulties to start, but it was a fun and. Aw, I see that. We just had a mayhar pop back in.
Final Farewells
We were gonna shred hers last, but. But she wasn't here when I was looking, unfortunately, so I'll have to come back to it next time. All right, thanks again, everyone. Have a great rest of your day, and I'll probably or hopefully see some of you later in the week.
Looking Forward
On the next space, Brandon, Nick, appreciate you guys for co hosting and ghost roasting with me. Enjoy your dinner, Taylor. I will, man. Peace.
